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The Lost Story Of the Clone Wars, Part I
 PostPosted: Fri Jul 20, 2012 10:01 pm Reply with quote  
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  Darth Bane
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I rewrote Part I of this fanfiction.

There were thousands of them. Each one, one and the same. I couldn't tell them apart. The only difference between any of them was the yellow commander marking on its head. Only about ten of them had one.

A Sith lord, Count Dooku, was leading them into battle. Thousands of them, hundreds of us. Mace Windu and Master Yoda, the most powerful Jedi in the galaxy, led the me and the rest of the clones into battle against the droids.

"Get Down!" Rex yelled just as a B-2 Battle Droid threw a grenade in my direction. I didn't know who he was yelling at, so I didn't know about the grenade until it was too late. Almost too late, anyway. When it hit me, I was quite surprised. When I realized what it was, I threw the grenade in the other direction and as a few of the battle droids exploded, I felt like it was just me on the battlefield.

I fired on the droids like I didnít care whether or not I made it out alive. I took a shot in the arm. Then to the leg. I collapsed from pain.

I knew I wasnít going to make it. I was bleeding out too fast to get out of this alive. Unless I was able to get back to base quick, I would be left to die. I tried to get up, then stumbled and fell back to the hard ground.

The droids were moving quicker than I was. It was clear they would catch me if I didnít pick up the pace. I tried, without succeeding, to quicken my faltering limbs so I could move faster. The droids caught up to me, grabbing my legs and pulling me back.

What do they want from me, I thought to myself. There was no way of escaping, so screaming was of no use. And then I blacked out...
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 PostPosted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 6:07 pm Reply with quote  
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In the films or the Eu, has anyone actually mentioned blood? It seems kind of unheard of, doesn't it?
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 PostPosted: Thu Nov 22, 2012 2:55 am Reply with quote  
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Films: Darth Maul spilled a little blood when he was cut in two by Obi-Wan, in A New Hope that Aqualish that lost his hand in the cantina to Obi-Wan spilled blood.

EU: TCW episode when Cad Bane is hurt, he drips some of his green blood on the floor of the LAAT,....

So yes, out of hundred of thousands that had died in the SW universe, I can think of at least three. Laughing

But than again, only Banes was actually mentioned Confused


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 PostPosted: Wed Feb 20, 2013 7:41 pm Reply with quote  
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I'm sorry, Jason. Do you have a problem with me getting into detail?
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No problem. I just feel that I can speak of what I know from the saga without being ridiculed.
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Did I ever say that you couldn't speak your mind? I don't recall.
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 PostPosted: Thu Feb 21, 2013 9:32 am Reply with quote  
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Easy now, people. Let's keep it friendly. There's nothing wrong with constructive criticism, so let's just move on.
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 PostPosted: Thu Feb 21, 2013 8:44 pm Reply with quote  
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Darth Skuldren wrote:
Easy now, people. Let's keep it friendly. There's nothing wrong with constructive criticism, so let's just move on.


No offense, Darth Skuldren, but I don't like his criticism. I don't feel that it has been all that constructive, more negativity.
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Darth Bane wrote:
Darth Skuldren wrote:
Easy now, people. Let's keep it friendly. There's nothing wrong with constructive criticism, so let's just move on.


No offense, Darth Skuldren, but I don't like his criticism. I don't feel that it has been all that constructive, more negativity.


No no no. I think that Skuldren's right. You shouldn't write these fan-fics if you can't take a little comments and reviews from the people who read it.
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I hope you realize what it is you have done today. Look to this emoticon to figure out what has happened.



Get ready for the debates of your life.
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These are the only words that I have for you: I'm ready when you are!
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Ok

So I've unlocked the thread so Bane can continue on his story. I'm leaving the earlier exchange up not to add to feelings, but as a reminder that differences of opinion can and WILL happen- but no one should be flaming or trolling each other. My hope here is that you two will engage in FRIENDLY debates, explore each others views or try and sway each other.

Remember EUCantina is to be a FUN friendly place.


As for blood- yes many stories have dealt with blood- some sabers fights even- not all wounds have been cauterized by the blade- there in fact have been cases where the blade left a bleeding wound.

My advice is this; when reading a post that gets your pulse racing- STOP re read it in a less hostile tone- try one more fun-joking and see if the message still crosses you. I have found more often than not I am misinterpreting tone.

I expect from here out all posts in this thread to be about Bane's story and his story alone.

Thanks and remember; the Force is with us.


EDIT: And Bane- I'll come back and edit all these posts out of the thread in the future so your story can flow- I'm leaving them for a while so the message can sink in before it's been removed.
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 PostPosted: Thu Feb 28, 2013 10:03 am Reply with quote  
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Yes, bane please continue your story i liked it and want to hear more!
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UPDATE: I went back and edited the fan-fiction. Hope you enjoy. Smile
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